REVIEWS

"It's good!"

"The only thing I would like more of is visualization. What do their offices look like?"

"It read like a script. It had the director's directions. Which is very hard to do. It has everything a soap opera has...it is superb. It has potential."

"I can't grasp it. What is she all about? How does she really feel about Corporate Life? She is scattered. The camera is running around, into other people's offices. What is the reason for writing this?"

All I can do is ask,

Why?

"But is it clear?"

"OH, Yes! It's very clear!"



"What is there to like about the girl? Why is she a main character? She's not an underdog or anything. No compassion: people are jerks."

"But this is a small sliver of the book. We don't know the whole story. We need more..."

"I work in an office and this is the way people feel. It's just like this. A lot of people can read it and feel that way."

"How does she feel about Corporate Life?"

"It doesn't make sense!"

"But it makes sense to somebody."

"She didn't even have a doctor. Yo get the sense that there is nothing for her in New York."

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FROM: The Learning Annex
SO YOU WANT TO WRITE A SCREENPLAY
Instructor: Mary Bringle
NYC, Spring 1990